11 January 2013

trifecta weekend challenge: new beginnings

linking up with the folks at trifecta for their weekend challenge. this time around its 33 words about a new beginning...
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When he left I was glad, because at least now he'd know.
He wouldn't think I was dead, or in China.
Now he knows I'm okay;
He knows he's free.
Happy Birthday, dad. 
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15 comments:

  1. Bo11 January, 2013

    This is beautiful! It's so important that they know that we are ok.

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  2. Roxanne11 January, 2013

    I think this sounds kind of sad. But poetic.

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  3. Dawn :)11 January, 2013

    Nice take on the theme!

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  4. Anonymous12 January, 2013

    What a sweet sentiment! Beautiful, poignant, and a sharp edge of honesty. Nicely done.

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  5. Anonymous12 January, 2013

    This has such a sad tone to it. "Now he knows I'm okay;
    He knows he's free." - This makes me imagine a dad reuniting with a grown child, but doesn't give the feeling of a lasting bond.

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  6. Atreyee12 January, 2013

    An unusual Birthday gift from a son-only a parent can understand the anxiety that "not knowing"causes-even of a grown up child-very touching,I like it:-)

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    1. Unknown12 January, 2013

      in truth, this poem is about the passing of my dad, which happened last march. yesterday was his birthday, and i was thinking about how, near the end of his life he was really bound by physical and mental issues. at one point he told my mom that i had died. another time, he told her i had moved overseas to work.

      so this is really about how the fog has lifted, and he really is well, and free...

      thanks for taking the time to stop by - s.

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  7. Draug12 January, 2013

    I'm glad he was able to find peace in the truth.

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  8. barbara12 January, 2013

    Thank you for sharing this, Steven. It is truly beautiful. I'm sorry for your loss.

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  9. kymm12 January, 2013

    Sad kind of freedom... Nice tribute.

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  10. Anonymous12 January, 2013

    This is just beautiful Steven. It reminds me of how I felt when my grandmother passed away.

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  11. dk13 January, 2013

    So sad and triumphantly heartwarming as well. Nice work.
    dk

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  12. Stacie @ Snaps and Bits13 January, 2013

    Very sad. Glad he was free of worry in the end.

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  13. Anonymous13 January, 2013

    Yep. When my dad was passing at hospice, they told us he might need us to tell him we were going to be okay and that he was free to let go and end his suffering. Beautiful work. Thanks for sharing it.

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  14. christina14 January, 2013

    oooh this made me sad. my grandmother is in a bad place now so this really touched me.

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